Saturday 2 March 2013

This is a very short poem - my attempt to satisfy the requirements of a little Saturday night fun at http://dversepoets.com/2013/03/02/poetics-an-evening-of-short-verse/ 

I don't know if I'm doing it right, but I haven't much time.  ;0)

The Gardener

With hoe, he scraped away the weed
sowed seed with love, his need to feed.


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32 comments:

  1. Claudia2 March 2013 at 20:38

    perfectly right...and that's a gardener after my own heart..sowing see with love..scraping away the weed... that's how to do it..right..

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  2. Brian Miller2 March 2013 at 20:40

    nah you did well fro two lines....love is the best fertilizer to see seed really grown....weeding can def be quite a chore as well...smiles.

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    1. Twigger2 March 2013 at 22:43

      Brian, the way I garden, hoeing is far preferable to digging, which I don't do :)
      Thank you for your encouragement.

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  3. Unknown2 March 2013 at 20:41

    yeah, this two liner tells much more than a two liner normally does. You have the soil, the weeds, seeds of love, and the multiple possibilities with needing to feed. Really very good. Thanks

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    1. Twigger2 March 2013 at 22:44

      Thank you Fred for your kind comments :)

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  4. Unknown2 March 2013 at 21:12

    Oh wow, nicely done. I like the rhythm that the rhyme creates here. I got a very vivid image in my mind with this. Thank-you for sharing this :)

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    1. Twigger2 March 2013 at 22:45

      Gretchen, thank you for your kind comments - Cheers!

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  5. Mary2 March 2013 at 21:28

    Excellent!

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  6. Laurie Kolp2 March 2013 at 21:35

    I think it's great!

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  7. Anonymous2 March 2013 at 22:36

    Two lines of perfect iambic tetrameter - and, as Fred has noted, you've managed to pack a lot into a little, which is what he was asking for.

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    1. Twigger2 March 2013 at 22:48

      Blimey! Did I really do that? That sounds very technical! :0)

      Thank you very much.

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  8. hyperCRYPTICal2 March 2013 at 22:39

    Tis excellent.
    Anna :o]

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  9. Lynne2 March 2013 at 23:08

    What hoe! This is nifty! I like!

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  10. henry clemmons2 March 2013 at 23:40

    Best hoe poem I ever read. And makes all the sense. Great rhyming.

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    1. Twigger2 March 2013 at 23:44

      Why, thank you Henry - How many hoe poems have you read? ;0)

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  11. Ravenblack3 March 2013 at 00:56

    There's always something wonderful about working the ground and planting seeds. :) It seems like gardener knows what is true as he works.

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    1. Twigger3 March 2013 at 03:22

      If he doesn't know, then he learns in time for next year. Thank you Raven.:0)

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  12. Anonymous3 March 2013 at 02:31

    Fifteen words, short n seed. Sorry couldn't resist. You were to the point, exactly. thanks.

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  13. Twigger3 March 2013 at 03:23

    Kim, I seed what you did there ;0) Thank you!

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  14. Ursa Bowers3 March 2013 at 06:13

    I read this, with a smile, full of sexual innuendo :O Sorry if that wasn't your intention; I can never escape my dirty, dirty mind. It totally works, though. The ideas of fertility and sexuality, obviously, are strongly intertwined. Thanks for the read ;)

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  15. Twigger3 March 2013 at 07:57

    Ursa, do you know, it never occurred to me, which really surprised me - but you are right - it's all there to be read, whichever way you want to read it - maybe it was subliminal ;0) However, I have a friend who has written a saucy little song about "doing a lady's garden" - "Just the way she likes it done" - absolutely full of innuendo - I think you might like that! ;0)
    cheers
    Rob

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  16. kelvin s.m.3 March 2013 at 09:24

    ...plant seed of love...grow it...and right time it will bear fruitful love... a need to feed our dirty mind, lustful soul... & hurting heart... great offering... i enjoyed it... smiles...

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  17. Marina Sofia3 March 2013 at 11:33

    Does the job perfectly, I would imagine. Amazing how much power you convey through a few well-chosen words.

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  18. Neil5 March 2013 at 09:27

    bob, that's just perfect. Writing it short is so difficult (you know how I ramble!). Everything about this is just right - nice one!

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    1. Twigger5 March 2013 at 09:35

      Aww thanks Neil, and thanks for reading, mate. ;0)

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